托福tpo50独立写作范文 第1篇
托福TPO22独立写作题目：
Question:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Teachers should not make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
托福TPO22独立写作范文：
It is indisputable that teachers play a pivotal role in teaching and guidance students in classes. They provide students a lot of precious knowledge which is very necessary for them in the future. However, should teacher show their social or political viewpoints to students? Each person has their own opinion toward this question. Some people approve it but others have the opposite one. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the latter that teachers should not make their social or political point of views in classes because it can reduce studying efficacy and influence viewpoints of students.
First and foremost, those teachers express their social or political opinions on the classes could reduce students’ studying efficiencies. In the classes, it is better for both teachers and students to focus on lectures and related problems. Teachers should discuss with students about
the lectures, share their researching or working experiences instead of talking about their political viewpoints. It definitely will increase the studying efficacy in the classes. Moreover, it also provides students a lot of real and valuable experiences. They could use these if they face difficulties when they work in the real environment. Indeed, when teachers show their point of views on the classes, it should be considered to waste time of students
Last but not least, when teachers make their social or political viewpoints known to students, they may influence students’ viewpoints. As a matter of fact, students usually do not have definite social or political standpoints. They are quite naive because they pay all their attention on studying and academic issues. Therefore, when teachers like showing their viewpoints, they may discuss or talk continuously about that issues. This really has an influence on the opinions of students, especially when their teachers’ opinions are biased. Additionally, this also prevents the free development of students. For instance, when my teacher usually express his disapproval about government, he makes us have the same opinions with him. Hence, most students of our class consider the policies or agreements of government are wrong or unsuitable without having any understanding about it. Obviously, the viewpoints of teachers have the potential to change the viewpoints of students
All in all, because when teachers manifest their social or political viewpoint on classes, it influences the studying effectiveness and students’ positions, I personally consider this is not a necessary work. I strongly recommend teachers concentrate on teaching and discussing academic-related issues on classes.
托福写作具体字数内容的解析
新托福独立写作的字数要求
作为新托福写作考试的一大重点部分，独立写作要求考生在30分钟内完成一篇字数在300字左右的文章。而根据对ETS最新的评分标准的解读，我们发现阅卷者评判考生的文章遵循的原则是：“Readers should focus on what the examinee does well.”。这就意味着整个评分过程是考察考生表现出优点的过程，而并非对考生的文章吹毛求疵的过程。因此，即使是一篇满分的文章，也是允许考生有少量的错误。在本章中，写作组的专家将就独立写作部分的字数要求进行分析。
对于独立写作的字数要求，官方的说法是：“An effective response is typically about 300 words long. If you write fewer than 300 words，you may still receive a top score，but experience has shown that shorter responses typically do not demonstrate the development of ideas needed to earn a score of 5.”。可见，若想得到高分，考生最好能将文章写到300字以上，虽然有些文章字数不足但仍可得到满分，但是毕竟这种情况比较罕见，要充分对于考题展开论述，从而有利地支持文章观点，充足的字数是必须的。
托福作文字数
关于小作文的字数，唯一的要求就是下限，不能低于180.但是如果点写道了，再少也不可能少于180.因此，字数不是关键，且字数超过标准，是没有关系的。
OG说180-225，我经常写道300左右，写的多不会反而扣分吧?
我很负责的说，写多了不会扣分，但是并不会加分。
托福大作文有一项评分机制是用正确的，不同的单词/一个定值，所以总字数越多，分子越大，这一项的得分越高。且在人工评分部分，字数多，会给阅卷官好的第一印象，至少你在限定时间内很能写。
然而小作文，基本上是机器评分就下了定论，人工评分部分基本上是重复机器的分。机器的评分标准就是对比你写的点和原文的点以及听力部分的点。答准1点，答全1点，得多少分，然后看你的改写程度，改写程度高，再加分。最后看你的结构是否完整，语法和词汇拼写正确率。
关于托福小作文的字数，唯一的要求就是下限，不能低于180.但是如果点写道了，再少也不可能少于180.因此，字数不是关键，且字数超过标准，是没有关系的。但是请注意，不要照抄原文来增加字数，照抄原文造成机器认定你对原文的改写程度过低，这是会被扣分的。
托福写作俗语的积累
1. 人山人海：有人直译为：People mountain people sea.
这就是「中国英文」，老外很难理解。他们指「人多」时，通常只说：「There is a large crowd of people.」如果看到电影院门前大排长龙，也只说：「There is (was) a long movie line.」
不过在诗词用语 (poetic expression) 里，老外也有使用：「a (the) sea of faces」，颇有咱们「人山人海」的味道。例如：
Looking out upon the sea of faces, Mr. A delivered a touching speech.(望着一片人山人海的听众， A先生发表一篇动人的演说。)
Standing at his podium, President Clinton saw a sea of faces waving at him.(柯林顿总统站在讲台上看到人山人海的人群挥手向他致意。)
可见，说话者通常要在台上或高处，才有「人海」的感觉。因此，可以说：I saw a sea of faces from the top of the building. 但在平地的人群中，就不说：「I saw the sea of faces.」也不说：「There is a sea of faces.」只说：「I saw a large crowd of people.」
2. 家家有本难念的经：有人译成：Every family cooking - pot has a black spot. (意思是：每个家庭的锅子都有黑色的污点)
这样说法，老外恐怕不能充分了解。不过老外最常的说法是：
Many families have skeletons in the closet. (许多家庭的衣柜里都有骨骸) (骨骸就是指家丑)
或者说：
Every family has its own source of shame. (每个家庭都有自己的丑事)
说白些，就是：
Every family has its own problem.
3. 天下无不散的宴席：有人直译为：There are no feasts in the world which do not break up at last.
老外听后，也许很难体会其中意义。如果按照美语说法，也许更易理解：
All good things come to an end. (意思是：所有好的事情，总有结束的一天。)
假如是指好友最后也有分别的一天，那么可以说：
Eventually, all bosom friends will drift apart. (bosom friend 是指知心的好友)
4.平时不烧香，临时抱佛脚：有人照字直译为：When times are easy, we do not burn the incense,but when the trouble comes, we embrace the feet of the Buddha.
这种说法，老外也会「一知半解」。美语里一般说法是：
Worship God every day; not just in times of adversity. (要每天敬拜神，不是只在困难时。)
对学生也可以说：
If you study hard every day, exams will not seem overwhelming. (如果你每天用功，考试就不会形成压力。)
5. 挂羊头，卖狗肉：有人照字直译为：He advertises mutton, but sells dog's flesh. 或 He hangs up a sheep's head at the shopfront and sells dog meat.
这两种译法，恐怕老外都难理解，尤其谈到「狗肉」，他们更会「反感」，因为狗是他们最爱的宠物，不过老外倒有相近的说法：
He applied bait-and-switch tactics in business. (他经商的策略是先引诱顾客来，再改变货物的品质。)
(Bait-and- switch 当名词用) (也可不用连字号)
This store uses bait and switch policy.
或者简单的说：
Let the buyer be aware! (让消费者提高警觉) ;或 Say one thing and do another.
6. 一言既出，驷马难追：有人译成：One word lets slip and four horses will fail to catch it. 或 A statement that once let loose cannot be caught by four galloping horses.
这两种说法，中文味道嫌重，老外未必理解。不过他们倒有类似的说法：
A word once let go cannot be recalled.
或者说：
You can not take back what you have said. (你说出的话，就不能再收回来。)
7. 祸从口出，言多必失：有人译为：The mouth is the gate of misfortune and evil.
老外听了，恐怕不能完全理解。最好说成：
Careless talk leads to trouble. (不小心说话，会带来麻烦); 或 The less said the better. (说的愈少愈好)
甚至也可以说：
Shut the mouth and open the eyes. (闭嘴少说，张眼多看。)
托福写作常见误区有哪些?
误区一：托福写作字数越多越好。
当我们单纯的看到“字数越多越好”的时候，可以说这是有一定的道理的，因为如果你的字数越多，那么就越能更好的阐明自己的观点，但是很多考友特别喜欢将这种思路发挥到极致。要知道其实托福作文如果能达到350字-450字就已经很好了，只要达到这个范围内基本上就不会对你的分数产生任何负面的影响了。
误区二：刚开始写作文，就要限定时间。
当我们刚刚开始准备作文的时候，我们现在国内的很多考友们，有可能在真正准备新托福考试的作文之前有可能从来都没有写过几篇作文，因此当面的托福考试这么多字数的要求的时候，常常会觉得自己无所适从。因此很多人，在准备不充分的情况下就限定自己一定要在规定的30分钟时间之内，完成托福作文。
殊不知，任何一个考试都是要循序渐进的，作文也是如此。当我们刚开始准备作文的时候，首先要追求的是成功率，也就是完成度，而不是时间。换句话说，在准备托福以及SAT作文的前期，首先要做的，是完成作文，也就是不管花多少时间，一定要让自己的作文达到300字以上，而且如果自己准备考试的时间比较充分的话，最好刚开始的3-5篇作文都是不给自己限定时间，首先追求的是能把作文写完，然后当我们感觉有话可说的时候，在提升自己的新托福写作速度，换句话说也就是限定自己在30分钟之内完成自己的独立作文。
误区三：不注重语法的准确。
现在的很多考友是生活在用英语的环境之中的，比如说现在有很多考友是在美国或者英国上高中的，当然也有很多考友是在国内纯英语的国际学校求学，这些环境往往是全英文的环境，本来一个全英文的环境是十分有助于英语水平的提升的，但是实际上，纯英语的环境对于英语的语法要求并不严格。
换句话说，有可能一句话虽然有语病，但是由于对方能听懂，因此他也没有纠正你，那么你也默认这里是没有问题的。因此我们会看到很多英语环境之内的考生，往往在作文的部分折戟沉沙铁未销，就是因为这个关键性的语法的问题。因此，当我们在准备作文部分以及口语部分这些主观题的时候，要注意在新托福写作考试之前一定要好好打磨一下自己的语法，否则后患无穷!
托福TPO22独立写作题目+范文
托福tpo50独立写作范文 第2篇
With the masses increase in affluence and awareness, college students tends to be spoiled with all kinds of well-equipped dorms. Private Jacuzzi, big screen TV set and even tanning salon are not rare on some college dorms. When it comes to the question of what the school should build in the dorm, I personally would say it is in the students’ best interest to build an entertainment room for the following reasons.
Admittedly, a quiet study room can provide a place for students to focus on their academic assignments and an exercising room affords them the opportunities to keep fit and stay in good shape, nonetheless, these facilities are redundant since an above-average university has at least one decent library and a recreation center for students and faculty members. Thus, it is not necessary to include such facilities in the campus dorms, and there are obvious benefits to build an entertainment room with home theater sets and video game consoles.
First off, an entertainment room provides students a chance to get away from busy life and study and switch off. As is known to all, college life can be overwhelming, students are constantly under lots of academic pressure, like presentations, group projects, final exams, so on and so forth. Barely do they have chance to release their pressure, fortunately with an entertainment room, they can watch movies or play video games together. As the saying goes, “all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy”. Indeed, recent research on the correlation between leisure time and students’ academic performance conducted by National Association of Psychiatrists shows that a student with certain amount of time spent in doing entertainment activities are observed to have higher grade than those who don’t. Consequently, entertainment room helps to improve students’ academic performance.
Additionally, an entertainment room provides a chance for students to catch up with their peers and bond more with one another. When playing video games or watching movies together, not only can students escape from their busy schedule, but also they can get a chance to talk to other students who also live in the same dorm building. Students who happen to live in the same dorm might have totally different majors and areas of concentration, so connecting with each other can help students to gain more exposure in other fields. Plus, students can use their moments in the entertainment room to get to know others who are from different regions of the country or even from other part of the globe, by interacting with people who are from distinctive culture backgrounds students can broaden their horizons and have unique perspective on different things. Without an entertainment, students living on the same floor might be strangers for four years, which can be a nightmare.
In conclusion, it is more advisable for the university to build an entertainment room since it provides students a chance to switch off, and also students can catch up with their peers and bond more with one another.
托福独立写作真题满分范文 想要高薪但是工作时间长的工作吗
Would you prefer a higher pay job with longer work time or an average pay job with normal work time.
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托福tpo50独立写作范文 第3篇
Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the project of sending humans to Mars would require solving an array of problems the Moon missions did not have to face.
One problem is that a round-trip to Mars and back is likely to take at least two years. The trip to the Moon lasted only a few days, and it was easy to bring enough supplies of food, water, and oxygen; but the cargo capacity of space vehicles is too limited to put on board the food, water, and oxygen required by a crew for a period of two years. Without those essentials, though, a Mars mission is impossible.
A second problem is that astronauts on the Mars mission would be in the zero-gravity environment of space for many months at a time. Spending a long time in the zero-gravity environment has negative effects on the human body, such as decreased muscle mass and lower bone density. Over the course of a two-year mission, the effects would be so severe, they would make it impossible for humans to make the trip without experiencing grave medical problems.
Finally, astronauts on a mission to Mars would be exposed to dangerous levels of space radiation, much of which comes in the form of charged particles emitted by the Sun. Earth’s magnetic field, which normally protects us from dangerous solar radiation, would not be able to protect a spaceship traveling in interplanetary space. Constructing a shield that would protect the whole spaceship from space radiation is at present impossible because it would add too much weight to the ship.
托福tpo50独立写作范文 第4篇
University courses lay a very solid academic foundation for the future development of college students. Facing the great selections of these courses, some say that history classes should be made compulsory for college students, for the reason that they could be more familiar with the advancement and evolution of human society. I disagree. I believe, despite minor merits, asking students of all majors to attend history classes would be problematic.
Initially, history courses would exert more academic pressure on students. College students have already had to study many theories and professional subjects related to their majors and their schedule is very tight. For example, a medical student is not only obliged to finish his professional papers for credit, but he also needs to find the opportunity to get clinical experience. Likewise, a student majoring in Marketing is required to read piles of books and analyze numerous business cases. Besides, working part-time in local companies to put theory into practice is what occupies most of their free time. Their load, therefore, is so heavy that they could not afford to take any irrelevant courses, such as history. In this case, universities should not add this course, because students would worry whether they are able to finish their assignment on time and how likely they would pass final examinations.
In addition, a required history course would lead to unnecessary financial costs for parents and students. To guarantee the quality of lecturing, colleges have to hire talented and senior history professors and experts, such as those from the best-known universities or history research institutes. This would increase the cost of schooling. Normally, a lecture given by a famous history professor costs over a thousand dollars, and these costs would be reflected in the tuition fee, which would increase students’ financial pressure. The case of my cousin Jeremy, a first-year physics student in the University of Hong Kong, illustrates this point. At the end of last semester, he was told to pay extra two thousand dollars for this year’s school fees because of the addition of a compulsory forty-hour course on World History on their syllabus. As this was hardly affordable for his family, they needed to take out a loan from a bank in the end.
Admittedly, taking history courses does have its merits. On the one hand, students could learn to prevent repeating the mistakes of the past. For instance, they would learn about the cause of the world wars and other bloody battles that claimed the lives of millions. On the other hand, students could also gain a better understanding of current issues by studying historical events. For example, by studying the American Revolution a student could be enlightened on the current world democracy. However, this knowledge could be acquired by other methods other than required courses; history seminars, TV documentaries and comparable books are all available options for students to learn about history.
托福tpo50独立写作范文 第5篇
官方真题Official1托福独立写作题目原文：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
官方真题Official1托福独立写作满分范文1：
As people regard education as an essential part of life more and more, where the educational budgets should be devoted to rises to a hot topic. Some people hold the view that money is supposed to be put into classes and libraries, while others believe that an equal amount of financial support should be given to sports and social activities at universities and colleges. From my perspective, sports and social activities make a complete campus life together with classes and libraries, so I firmly agree with the statement. First of all, playing sports makes a person healthy and energetic to face the future challenges. It can be seen everywhere that more and more students wear glasses, and too much reading along with facing computers for a long time makes it even worse. Then they may suffer from eye problems or other physical diseases. The only way of improving this case is to encourage them to take some time relaxing in sports. Furthermore, playing a ball game together is the best method to promote teamwork spirit. After a period of playing together, members will develop a way to solve problems and achieve their common goal. Therefore, sports strengthen one's body as well as enhance the spirit of teamwork. Besides, social activities can help foster abilities that students cannot gain during classes or self-studying. Though being smart and diligent, some students are called pedants because of not being able to exchange ideas with others freely. Only if a person is equipped with knowledge and is capable of expressing it can he become competent. So, it is significant for them to take part in social activities with the aim of lifting their communication skills. When pedants are forced to talking with others, it's a great chance for them to make new friends and express their thoughts, which may be an opportunity for their future career. Last but not the least is that the places provided for sports and social activities are in need of money. It is common that the school will spend a large sum of money to purchase updated books and facilities to fulfill the requirements of classes and libraries. However, finding a suitable place to play sports or hold social activities is always hard. Take my university as an example, if I want to read a book, I can easily find a seat in the library, but if I want to run for half an hour, the crowded gym will just turn me into a upset mood. Then, requiring the same amount of financial support to ameliorate the condition is just reasonable. In a nutshell, financial support should be contributed to sports and social activities just like classes and libraries, for they help with strengthening bodies, making progress in communication skills and they are in shortage of fund.
官方真题Official1托福独立写作满分范文2：
Some people claim that universities and colleges should not spend a great deal of money on sports and social activities, as their budgets should prioritize classes and libraries. However, as educational institutions, universities and colleges have an obligation to provide a wide range of knowledge to their students to help them develop academically and socially. An increasing number of businesses have high demand for people who are not only specialists in their fields, but also skilled in social interaction. With the ever changing science and technology, no task can be fulfilled by a single person and given the need for collaboration, social skills and team spirit are indispensable qualities for success. Clearly, sports and social activities in universities and colleges provide students with the perfect settings to practice their social skills. By playing football in a team or joining in a contest, for instance, students can develop a sense of belonging and experience team spirit, both of which are quite essential for their future careers. Aside from fostering social skills and team spirit, sports and social activities can greatly help students release their pressures. Nowadays, students not only have to finish all the tasks assigned by teachers, but also have to attend many extra-curricular training courses. Even the most enthusiastic people feel tired and exhausted if they keep this busy schedule for a pretty long time. For example, when I was in high school, I would play basketball with my classmates. I could always get good refreshment and resume schoolwork with higher efficiency later on. Admittedly, academic education will always be at the heart of a university. In universities, sports and social activities should by no means take the place of a focus on academic study. However, what I believe is that universities and colleges are supposed to invest in academics as well as sports and social activities. For instance, in the United States, almost all famous universities have plenty of sports teams and social groups, and universities provide adequate financial support for these events. Both of these fields are highly valued. For these reasons, I maintain that universities and colleges should spend enough money on academic education and social movements to prepare students for their future development.
如何提高托福写作速度?
一、打字速度
想要提高写作速度，离不开熟练度的提高。每天半小时，电脑左右两边各一word文档，左边是英文材料，从词汇到句型到段落到 篇章，右边是空白文档。先边看边打，再试着把左边遮去，这样反复操练，既提升了速度，又巩固了词句，提升了语感，还能顺便背下几个好的段落。
二、“模板”
一个好的模板毫无疑问能够帮助大家节省时间。但是这样做也存在一定的弊病。首先对学生写作能力的真正的提升是有害的。其次对提分来说更不现实，因为考官甚至包括E-rater(电脑阅卷)都很容易识别出模板的套路，并且模版属于别人，与个人的写作风格和用词习惯格格不入，不是填词就能解决的。
这里强调的是“思维模版”。你在写作前需要对议论文开头主体结尾段中地每一部分你需要往哪个方向写和想表达什么意图掌握清楚。拿开头为例，有很多方法，比如时间对比、经历描述、引言、数据、背景、设问等等。实际考试只有一个开头，不需要掌握所有方法，但要用精其中一种。
三、理由
托福独立写作虽然话题简单，却考察着学生较强的问题地解释和分析能力，虽然不需要太深刻，但一定要具体有道理。很多考生在论证的时候，要么是想不出来，要么就是解释的没有逻辑没有条理。
从长远看，多阅读和多思考，多参加一些能锻炼思辨能力的活动是非常有效的。但如果短期提升思考速度，就必须掌握一些常见问题的常规思考角度。
四、材料
材料就是文章的内容，考生一定要有一个自己的材料库。托福写作题目有它自身的合理性，它能保证任何一个有过生活学习经历的人都能完整地写出一篇好作文。
托福写作想要拿高分这些细节不可忽视!
细节一：开头段交代清楚就行，不要一味求长!
为什么有形式主语呢?很简单，因为真正的主语太长了，容易对我们的理解造成影响，而且主语太长不美观，因此出现了形式主语it。既然语法中都有这样的一个用法，那么我们写作中又为何不遵循这个要求呢?开头段写得太长，占用时间不说，有时候开头段话都说尽了，会严重影响主体段的展开。因此，独立写作的开头段不要写太长，一般50-80个单词是极好的。
细节二：每段写完记得空一行!
为什么呢?好看呗!试想一下，如果你的作文各段都连在一起的，你自己看起来舒服吗?更别说挑剔的考官来看了!你的作文如果不能从内容上征服考官，至少要在 篇章结构上给人一种舒适的感觉!所以，每段写作记得空一行，你写着舒服，考官看着也舒服，正所谓“你好我也好!”
细节三：正式文体若能坚持不随意缩写，那将是极好的!
缩写好吗?不好!因为首先不缩写的话可能是两个单词，缩写完单词数就少了!不过，这个点其实并不是最关键的，重点在于托福写作是应试作文，应该保持正式文体的写作风格!缩写会给人一种非正式的赶脚!所以，能够不缩写的尽量不要缩写。比如can’t，最好在托福写作中写成cannot，而can not则是英式英语的写法，记住了!
细节四：不要一写作文就把你“七大姑八大姨”搬出来，他们年纪大了，让他们歇歇吧!
托福写作，太多这些个人的例子会给人一种非常personal的感觉!本身写作是在发表你自己的观点。虽然说托福的写作题可支持亦可反驳，但是关键点还在于你的论述能否让人觉得有一丝丝的可信度!举个例子，难道你姨喜欢吃的水果，大家都喜欢吗?所以，写作的例子若能避开太多个人例子，那又是极好的!或者如果你很强，可以考虑以客观的方式来写个人的例子!
托福写作错误
1、用词不当
学生们在托福写作中或多或少都会有一些用词不当的问题，但是要注意的是一些最最基本的错误是不能犯的。
In the show，if participators answer twenty problems that the host mentioned correctly，they will get five hundreds thousand U。S。 dollars as a prize。
problems应改为questions
2、拼写错误
还请备战托福考试的同学们注意，这里的拼写错误不是指在考试时候的误打，而是本身对词汇拼写记忆的错误。
In conclusion，issue of whether parents are the best teachers is a complex one，requiring subjective judgement，consequently，there are no easy or certain answers。
judgement应改为judgment
3、乱用大词
First of all，children can earn money from their jobs，although there isn’t too much，but they will keep their salary gingerliness。
这里的gingerliness根本是不知所云。该句子还有以下问题：
1)该作文题目是讲学生是否应该做兼职，因此children的出现就显得很莫名其妙;
2)although和but是不能连用的;
3)指代不明，they不知道是指代前面的什么;
4.表达中式
The second argument-it might have been noticed by others-is that in some occasion， it is quite difficult to compare parents to teachers because parents are a kind of people， teachers are a kind of vocation.
5.表意重复
They shocked their friends， devastated their families， crushed their best friends.
前面已经提到了朋友，后面又提到朋友。
The show is so compelling but attractive.
compelling和attractive是同义词，所以这里这么写就让人不明白。
6.固定用法错误
To some extends， I agree with the author’s general assertion that if parents also have a comprehensive sense of professional knowledge.
——To some extends应改为To some extent
7.例证夸张
For example， when a doctor faces a patient who has got cancer， the doctor cannot tell the truth， for the truth may cause the patient’s immediate death.
虽然善意的谎言是必要的，但是其功效显然没有这么大。
8.成分多余
According to a comprehensive investigation which is carried out by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences shows that there is an increase in the number of university students who are taking part-time jobs.
该句中的shows that是多余的成分。
9.词性混乱
However， the questions such as “Have you ever regretted marrying your husband” may be very privacy and embarrassingly.
句子中的privacy和embarrassingly应该改成private和embarrassing。
10.文体不正式
All of the players gonna to tell the truth in attempt to win $500，000.
——gonna过于口语化。
In addition， I think people shoudn’t always tell the truth to others.
——在托福作文中尽量不要用缩写，这里应该写should not。
11.两个独立句子间无连词
Another point is that young people are more aggressive and energetic， and it’s suitable for them to choose such jobs， which will provide them with rich experience that is essential for their future success.
这个错误犯的频率相当高，一定要注意。
12.时态错误
托福大作文一般使用现在时态，除了拿过去事件作为例子用过去时态。
Some people claimed that news media has enormous influence and is a detrimental creation.
—— claimed应该改为claim
13.不知所云
They also mention that in modern society there are too much entertainment bothering them as the huge gap lying between them and the success.
官方真题TPO1托福独立写作题目文本+满分范文
托福tpo50独立写作范文 第6篇
题目为：The diagram below describes how to change organic waste into garden fertilizers. Describe the process.以下为范文及范文解析
The flow chart illustrates the process by which organic waste are converted into garden manure.
It is noticeable that five stages are shown on the diagram. The processes begin with preparing equipment and end at spreading compost materials.
At the initial stage, a plastic container which is about two cubic meters can be used and the cover on the top of it should be kept sealed. Meanwhile, drilling some holes enables air to pass through the device. After that, waste materials including food, grass and newspaper are put into the container layer by layer, of which the depth is the same with 15 centimeters.
At the third stage in the process, the materials are mixed with moderate nitrogen and water is added to keep sufficient moisture before placing the container on hot weather condition. Then, gases escape from the holes after the device is heated by hot weather. Finally, six months later, compost ingredients and worms are produced into high-quality fertilizers which could be spread on gardens.字数 167 words
范文原创自小站叶瑜琪老师
3.高分表达
be converted into 转换成为
garden manure 花园肥料
It is noticeable that…… 显著的是..
At the initial stage 最开始阶段
After that 之后
layer by layer, 逐层
At the third stage in the process 第三阶段
are mixed with 被混合
high-quality fertilizers 优质肥料
托福tpo50独立写作范文 第7篇
To sum up, I think universities should not require history courses for all students.（建议补充分论点的总结）
语言丰富度：3分
语言准确度：4分
结构完整性：4分
扣题和逻辑：4分
综合评分：分
作文等级：Good
卷面分数：24分
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